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Mike Sibley
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Posted Mar.6th, 2019, viewed 42 times
OK... I'm going to be picky with this one too :o)
More ice cream spoons (paddles rather than oars) that might work out well. I think you'd need to play around with them. At present, they form a sort of pattern that needs the symmetry to be removed.
The chain is still curving upwards rather bizarrely. You could fix it to the concrete, but you could equally just pass it behind a lot of stones and suggest it's tied up out of the frame - which is not unusual.
The lobster pot is OK but too small for the boat - bit it would work. Maybe with the top of another one sticking up out of the boat at an angle? More meaningful and less contrived.
And then the gull, which I like... but do be careful. The mind can play tricks, so you need to step back sometimes and take a broader look. The gull is NOT, as stated, looking at the lobster pot. If you follow its gaze... Yes, it is looking in that direction. But the pot is way behind it at the back of the boat, and the gull is looking... maybe at the oars. To see the pot it would have to almost turn its back to us.
I nearly forgot to mention the seaweed. Good stuff is seaweed. Solves a lot of problems. As do stones in the sand. They break up the foreground and, suitably arranged, can lead the eye into the composition.
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